Once upon a time there was an adult called Scott who
lived in an air ship. Scott liked to adventure in the air early in the morning
looking for new animals that haven't been discovered by humans.
One day he was looking for new animals as usual, when he
saw bits of air ship falling off.
He thought, "I hope everything's okay down there?" He went down to
see what happened when... WHOOSH!
Scott looked out his window and ... and there were thousands of graceful flying beetles floating in the air. WHOOSH!, FLAP!, ZOOM!
Scott looked out his window and ... and there were thousands of graceful flying beetles floating in the air. WHOOSH!, FLAP!, ZOOM!
Scott wondered if he could use the beetle's shell to
cover the gaps in the air ship so that it can fly again. So he lassoed the
beetle and he got a bulls eye! Although he got the beetle, the rope started to
snap... SNAP! So Scott made a life changing decision, it was to abandon his
ship.
He leaped out of his ship and landed on a flying
beetle's back. Scott said, "So this is what it feels like to be
a flying beetle!"
Suddenly they vanished into fog and... Wallah! They were at the Amazon rainforest in forest land! Then the strangest thing happened to Scott... He felt the warm hug of a beetle! He had made a special bond with the beetle! Scott called the beetle Dylan.
Suddenly they vanished into fog and... Wallah! They were at the Amazon rainforest in forest land! Then the strangest thing happened to Scott... He felt the warm hug of a beetle! He had made a special bond with the beetle! Scott called the beetle Dylan.
From now on Scott lives with Dylan in the treehouse they
made together. They play fetch, catch the rope, and water fight. And they lived
happily ever after!
The
End!
I like your story because you used a lot of onomatopoeia. Netani
ReplyDeleteummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm what does onomatopoeia mean netani
Deleteby brendon :()
It Means words like BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
DeleteI like your writing Lachlan.It has lots of adgitives.grace
ReplyDeleteI like your story Lachlan
ReplyDeleteWow Lachlan! Dad and I think your story is great. You are becoming a wonderful author. VERY proud!!
ReplyDeleteMum.
Maybe i'll be as good as Andy Griffiths.
DeleteLachlan
That's a cool story. Very imaginative and well written
ReplyDeleteThank you for your nice comments. Lachlan.
DeleteI loved reading your lively, imaginative story! Excellent use of direct speech and punctuation!
ReplyDeletehello lachlan and mrs armitage. I love the story
ReplyDeleteby brendon :)
ReplyDeleteI LOVE IT TO!!!!!! (:
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